So, What's everyones opinon on the story so far?
So, What's everyones opinon on the story so far?
Good, controlled, and a solid pace, but I would like to see who our true enemy is (if possible to do so without ruining a good chunk of the story). And maybe add a touch more of mature comedy (not sexual comedy, but not stuff like "guess what chicken butt" either)
So basically along the lines of
"Shad says: We need to get into their base and reveal them"
"Rex says: I didn't know you were THAT kind of player"
Not implying Rex is gay, it's just an innuendo joke.
Maybe a little less sexual talk, but you are almost along the right lines.
Hmm... we should actually incorporate that little joke in, as we're about to enter an organization base.
I don't want the story to have immature toilet humor.
TTA: Haha, farts.
Rex: YEAH! *depants TTA*
If that actually happened I would shiver.
I think the team would actually make it to the orginzation's base, and catch a quick glimpse of the leader, but he is wearing a white mask with a question mark on it, and a voice distorter. Then they get teleported away.
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17 PAGES LATER.....
The team finally figure out who the organization leader is! But then get teleported back to their hideout.
69 PAGES LATER.....
Nonononononononon.
We are not pulling a dragon ball z for the last time
20 PAGES LATER....
The team runs into a maze and they have to figure out how to get through it.
10 EXCRUCIATING PAGES LATER....
STC, is the reason you're not replying because the story is too slow?