So, What's everyones opinon on the story so far?
So, What's everyones opinon on the story so far?
Expressionless Admin
Good, controlled, and a solid pace, but I would like to see who our true enemy is (if possible to do so without ruining a good chunk of the story). And maybe add a touch more of mature comedy (not sexual comedy, but not stuff like "guess what chicken butt" either)
Member
So basically along the lines of
"Shad says: We need to get into their base and reveal them"
"Rex says: I didn't know you were THAT kind of player"
Not implying Rex is gay, it's just an innuendo joke.
Expressionless Admin
Maybe a little less sexual talk, but you are almost along the right lines.
Member
Hmm... we should actually incorporate that little joke in, as we're about to enter an organization base.
I don't want the story to have immature toilet humor.
TTA: Haha, farts.
Rex: YEAH! *depants TTA*
If that actually happened I would shiver.
I think the team would actually make it to the orginzation's base, and catch a quick glimpse of the leader, but he is wearing a white mask with a question mark on it, and a voice distorter. Then they get teleported away.
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Eh, It was worth a shot.
wait what, I'm seriously wondering when would be a good time to reach the leader since this seems like it's been going on for awhile nowOriginally Posted by Rex The Fox
Let's not pull a dragon ball z here people.
ARE YOU STUC TO THE PAST??
17 PAGES LATER.....
The team finally figure out who the organization leader is! But then get teleported back to their hideout.
69 PAGES LATER.....
Eh, It was worth a shot.
Nonononononononon.
We are not pulling a dragon ball z for the last time
ARE YOU STUC TO THE PAST??
20 PAGES LATER....
The team runs into a maze and they have to figure out how to get through it.
10 EXCRUCIATING PAGES LATER....
Member
STC, is the reason you're not replying because the story is too slow?
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